The important of english in this era can not be tolerated anymore.In fact, english as international language because a lot of the major place speak it and is one of the most populer and most spoken in the technology world. Beside of it, english is as a lingua franca that facilitate the comunication between two or more people that have different mother tongue. In the other hand, english is so important because now english used as universal language of science, it means we can communicate with other scientists anywhere in the world. So thatfore english can not be tolerated in this era.
Your writing is good, and you can use the different sentence to restate your topic sentence in conclusion :)
BalasHapusThanks for your comments because
BalasHapusit can make me write better paragraphs anymore and as i know that conclusion should restate the topic sentence, so i don't have to change the sentence but
make it more specific and don't change the meaning of topic sentence.
I think your writing is good enough. However, you probably can add more ideas to make your writing rich. And please bear in mind the use of capital letters in your writing. Let's see further your revision
BalasHapusthank for your comment sir, i'm sorry if my paragraph is too short because i have no idea to add.
BalasHapusRevisi:
Importance of English in this era can not be tolerated anymore. In fact, English as international language because all the major place speak it and is one of the most populer and most spoken in the technology era. Besides, English is as a lingua franca that facilitate the comunication between two or more people that have different mother tongue. In the other hand, English is so important because now English used as universal language of science, it means we can communicate with other scientists anywhere in the world. So that, importance of English can not be excepted in this era.
_ your comment sir ?